dialogue and names

[repost from Multiply blog from Nov '05]

dialogue and names
Nov 25, ’05 5:09 PM

(this is mostly for my own notes and such more than anything)

* Most people don’t speak in perfect grammar
* Underlying emotion and conflict bring dialogue to life
* People have habitual words/phrases
* Use dialogue and the description around it to convey what might otherwise be described with adverbs

But yes. Having spent all of my life (‘cept those thre months in CA) in Kentucky, I know that some people “talk funny” – use poor grammar (like splitting infinitives), make strange contractions, use strange slang …

… and names.

Am torn between Shayla, Shauna, and Shayna …

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repost

Preston and I had a chat about Heir last year, when it was still in developmental stages. Here’s a repost of that discussion:

Q – Knowing what I know about Michael from the second book, when they go to Sugar Run late that night (in the first book) and Sami exclaims that she used to have picnics there when she was younger, I almost see it as an attempt to connect by Michael to the youth he didn’t get to experience with her, because he already knows how she is to him.
A – Thing is, Michael was driving by Sugar Run as that was the closest route to take from Middlesborough to his house out in Bum Fuck. Although, since you mentioned it, in retrospect his conversation with Sami about family would more qualify for what you’re discussing here. Remember, vampires are telepathic. So Michael heard Sami wondering to herself why she had almost yelled “Mom” when she was scared. He said that she never spoke about her family, but he could hear the things she left unsaid. This is, of course, why he left the room so quickly, when otherwise he wouldn’t have dreamed of leaving her alone and upset.

We see a glimpse of his knowing her in the first book when he introduces her to the Family gathered around the dining room table, when he says, “Everyone, this is Samantha.” You get a sense that he’s discussed her with them, or at least with some of them, at some point. I always felt that she missed the inflection in his voice when he said “this is Samantha”, particularly given her mood and emotional state at the time–and perhaps because he wanted her to miss it? And I feel that maybe the “dark-haired girl” who touches Sami’s arm is Elissa from the second book.

Q – Michael gave Sami more than she realized when she became the new Elder. And at some point, might she realize that…the act of transferring his power is what began his decline in vitality? Will we see a steady decline in Michael’s vitality as well as realization from Sami that this is happening?
A – Yes, Michael begins to decline the night he and Sami exchange blood and energy; we see the outward, physical signs in the way he looks and behaves. Of course, as time goes on, Sami does understand that something is wrong, but she doesn’t see just what until it’s too late. The realization likely comes in retrospect. (ie, I’ve not gotten this written yet!)

Q – At some point does Sami begin to realize exactly how much power she gained from Michael? Not secular power, but real spiritual magical power…vampiric power.
A – Of course she does! :D

Q – How are Houses identified? Do they have names? Are the names based on the person who is their leader?
A – Well, there would be no true Family identity or continuity if the House names changed with each new Elder every thirty or forty years. Houses are named according to Family identity and heritage. For example, “Michael’s” House is called Anethdraeg, which is a bastardized Anglicization of annedd and draig, house and dragon in Welsh, respectively; even though the family bloodline is more likely English, they seem to identify more strongly with Welsh heritage.

Q – The mysterious other House in the area that Michael mentioned once in the first book and never mentioned again–anything about this in the future?
A – Perhaps. :warped:

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retyping hell

Yesterday I started retyping Elders. The stuff that had actually been saved and recoverable was from waaaaay back in March and pretty much useless. So I have the printouts sitting here on my desk, along with the handwritten additions. What’s missing, though, are several scenes that I never got a chance to print out–including a particularly poignant scene between Sami and Phillip at the end of the story. I sat down and cried yesterday when I realized I’d lost that.

So yeah. I have parts that I have to rewrite thanks to the lords of the hard drive crash. I can’t say I’m handling either point very well. The things I’m rewriting just aren’t coming out with the same…”flava”. And then there are the scenes I know I lost, but I can’t remember what they were. :headdesk:

Anyway. With both myself and Preston tackling this retyping job, I do still hope to get Elders out to first readers around the first of November…

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